B.J. (pittydirl) wrote in magnetwords,
B.J.
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These are some haikus that were recently rejected from a literary journal. I'm not hatin' or taking it personally since that's the way the ball bounces when you're a writer. I think they're actually pretty decent. :) Constructive criticisms are welcome. :)

x-posted to my journal



Needs (two haikus in one)

I smile on dates
and laugh on our adventures
at the creek. He says,
"You're more hot today
than yesterday." "I love you"
would be nice to hear.

April Showers

Flowers sparks my hair,
giving my scalp sensations.
I prefer shampoo.

Fling

She smiles tonight
during their drive around town.
She frowns months later.

Taboo

My wedding rings shines
as he lays me on the bed.
I take it off now.
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